Thursday, January 27, 2011

Damaged

The man stood at the edge of the table, two other men surrounded him. They were conspiring an attack on the government at the white house, where they heard he will be there from another terrorist. The men were angry about the state of anarchy their country was in. They had gone days, maybe weeks, without food or water for days while the secretly enforced American military attacked them in the middle of the goddamn night.Their secret head quarters--his basement--was dimly lit with a single, grimy light bulb. The three men clicked it off and headed to the scene this "big shot" president was going to give as he merely waved to bystanders as he climbed into his "big shot" limo.
"Hurry up! Before the bombs go off under him! I want to see it explode..." he said giggling.
The other men exchanged looks. This guy was officially crazy. First he wanted to see if sunflowers will grow in his basement...now this. They're anger made them follow him out to the vast street, leading them to the White house. One man, who had a child of his own paused. He saw a tractor with the key still dangling from the keyhole. He was already on the tractor before the other men noticed. The man drove right up in front of the president, snatched him and dumped him with a security guard. The other two men, including the man who was reluctant about the whole blow-the-president-up idea, were apprehended. The crazy man cursed. The next day, newspaper reporters from all over stated that officials have figured out that this man had serious damage to his head, thinking of how life is really just a dream....

3 comments:

  1. EXCELLENT!
    I totally love it!
    Great use of vocabulary words:)
    I could understand this story easily. Great job!

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  2. Maybe you went a little too fast and maybe you could've used more paragraphing, but it is still good! it's a creative story, good job

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  3. great use of vocabulary words but maybe next time space the events out more
    Good job .

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